(December 31, 2016 2:15 am)Flibertyjibet Wrote: for when/if this is developed further, could there be more non-rapey sex scenes? 99% of the sex in this is really rapey and I'd love to see some more consensual content
Yeah, and make it more detailed and kinky. Make it like a porno.
I wish I had a loving pregnant girl to love, cherish, and call my own.
January 3, 2017 2:40 pm
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I feel like the "rapey" sex scenes are already porno-ish -- what with the involuntary orgasms, gratuitous butt-slapping and the whole "you know you're enjoying it." It's the only thing I find distasteful. I'd like to see the rape and blackmail encounters re-thought out, just because I don't imagine even the most gullible high school teen letting herself be trapped like that unless she was being sex-trafficked. Would she really face expulsion for being on a porn site? Unless she's in private school I sort of doubt it. And her teacher's got literally nothing on her anyway. Whatever he does to her she'd be allowing to happen, and he'd have everything to lose after that.
I've been going through all the scenarios (including trying to get myself raped/blackmailed during all stages of pregnancy) just to collect all the pages before offering feedback. Seems kind of pointless now with it up in the air as to who might come along and continue writing this. But I'm still pasting it together for my own amusement. It IS a well-designed script, and even the inconsistencies I think speak to the reliability of the character. Making the activities less repetitive would require tons more in the way of writing. But I would like to see more repercussions and carry-over.
(This post was last modified: January 6, 2017 2:51 am by samantha.)