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About to pop
Misty Nights Offline
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About to pop
My first ever attempt at a story. It's wrote in my spare time so I'm aware if it's not very good.
All feedback is appreciated, wether positive, negative or just a mix. I'll consider writing a sequel and finishing it up If there are any fans.
English is not my main language, so if there are any spelling mistakes or punctuation mistakes I do apologise. I tried my best.
If anyone enjoys it please feel free to comment saying what you liked or maybe something you'd change.
Now enough of me. Enjoy!

The three heavily pregnant teenagers all sat on Jessie's bed, a pile of empty food of wrappers before before them, spicy foods to be specific. Each girl was tired of waiting for labour to come naturally so they all decided to try to induce labor.
Jessie sighed
"My makeup looks alright doesn't it..?" She asks nervously.
"It looks fine." Molly snapped at her, tired of how low her confidence has gotten since her belly has been getting bigger. All girls had pretty large boyfriends so that helped in making sure they got bigger. Out of all of them Lilly was the only one still with her boyfriend. Brandon, who happens to be quite the introvert, despite being bulky and perfect for Rugby.
Lilly was one of the prettiest and sexist girls in their school, though she never liked to say so out loud. Always wearing tight jeans to show off her perfectly sized ass. Her boobs were big before the pregnancy but now, they were humongous. Her belly however, was the main centrepiece. It reached out Infront of her by at least 2 feet and her belly button clearly sticks out. It doesn't help that her shirts are always "accidentally" too tight.
She moaned a little as she felt another Braxton hick contraction, Braxton hicks gave regularly been coming for Lilly, the fact she has her boyfriend who would never miss an opportunity for sex is to thank for her impending labour.
Molly notices and wraps her arm around Lilly's back and she slides her other hand to her belly which is an impressive size for such a tiny girl but not as big as Lilly's, but Lilly was overall bigger than Molly by quite a big reaching at 5"8 while Molly is only 5"5. Molly cradles her large belly which houses her son who happens to be kicking up a storm. Something Jessie doesn't miss,
"Oohhh!"
She exclaims as her hands quickly go to Mollies bare belly nod they trace the rapid movements, much to Mollies displeasure.
"Jessie" she sighs "You have your own...please, hands off"
Jessie grins and keeps rubbing her belly, moving one hand down to her sensitive under belly. Molly is the only one so far who's baby has dropped so she seems to be closest to labor.
Molly lets out a quiet moan but then a slight gasp of pain as she feels a tightening pain deep from her belly. One unlike any Braxton hick, one that lasts longer too. 'could this be the real thing?' Molly suddenly thought to herself.
(This post was last modified: October 25, 2016 6:15 pm by Misty Nights.)
October 25, 2016 6:14 pm
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RE: About to pop
Like, nothing really happened? Not really a story. This is just a straight-up description of three people, and that's almost entirely sans-character description or anything like that (aside from the guys, who don't seem to make much sense here).

Excellent English for the most part, though!
October 25, 2016 8:54 pm
Misty Nights Offline
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RE: About to pop
This was really meant to be an introduction. But I do get where you're coming from. I've tried to take ideas of stuff to write from other stories I've read before. Obviously if I do continue I'm going to end up going into more detail on the descriptions (age, race, personality...etc)

and thank you! I've been learning English for a few years now so I'm not perfect as it but hopefully it's not so bad.

Thanks for the feedback! I'll make sure to keep it in mind if I end up furthering the story
October 25, 2016 9:15 pm
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RE: About to pop
I would indeed like to see this more fleshed out.
October 26, 2016 8:38 am
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RE: About to pop
We want more
October 26, 2016 9:34 am
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RE: About to pop
Bro hurry up and do more maybe add lesbian scene and have em help eachother induce labor and birth type stuff
October 29, 2016 5:12 pm
Misty Nights Offline
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RE: About to pop
I'm going to start working on part 2 tomorrow. It'll be much longer and there will be attempts to induce labor. As well as a possible lesbian scene.
October 29, 2016 10:41 pm
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RE: About to pop
Any word on how's this going
November 5, 2016 2:51 pm
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RE: About to pop
Anything
November 17, 2016 2:16 pm
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RE: About to pop
Patience.


The best works need time. Do not rush them.
November 17, 2016 10:19 pm
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